My entry for Susanna Leonard Hill’s Second Annual Holiday Contest: read the rules and other entries here
Splash! Crash! Dash!
(read or sing to the rhythm of Jingle Bells)
Driving through the canyon, in a rickety SUV
Mom and Dad in front, and I sat with Marie
On the radio, they played every Christmas song
And to each and every one, my sister sang along
Oh – Splash! Splash! Splash! Through the air, hot chocolates taken flight
On my face, and in my hair – you can guess I was uptight!
Christmas at the cabin, is what Mother had in mind
After two days with my sister, I felt so confined
Nestled in the woods, with no gameboy or tv
Done with playing cards, and losing monopoly –
“Oh – Nash! Nash! Nash! Let’s go out! Make angels or a fort.
Better yet, grab the skis, we’ll glide around for sport.”
Branches crack and pop, as we fail to keep the course
Just how will we manage, to survive without remorse?
Stumbling ’round the lodgepoles, with the snow up to our knees
It seems my sister’s goal, to slay us with her skis –
Oh – Crash! Crash! Crash! Up and down, covered head to toe
Oh what fun it is NOT to face plant in the snow.
On and on we forge, covered in bits of ice
Frozen to the core, I suggest we head home twice
My gloves are pretty useless, my bindings kinda loose
What is that sound behind me, a Grizzly or a moose?
Oh – Dash! Dash! Dash! Fast as we can, sticking to the track;
Somehow she, instinctively, leads us sound and safely back!
OMG! Julie you made me laugh 🙂 The image of them crashing around in the woods, and then what is that? A grizzly or a moose? 🙂 Tons of fun, and a well-done story about siblings! Thanks for a great entry – I’m so glad you joined in he holiday fun! 🙂
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Susanna – you know how to bring on the holiday cheer!
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Hahaha – the reality of many of my family Christmasses was a certain amount of tension, like this! Love the NOT face-planting in the snow!
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Yes, I pulled from a well of memories too!
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I found myself singing it outloud! Hillarious! I can’t believe you have an irritating sister, too!
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Thanks to my irritating siblings I have a lot of ‘stuff’ to throw into my stories! Thanks for ‘tuning’ in!
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That was so much fun! Love the emphasis on family. Your rhyme was great! Read it twice!
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I bet I am off in spots by a mile, but I had so much fun I don’t even care!
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That is awesome! Slay us with her skis is my favorite. You depict sibling rivalry perfectly! :0)
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Thanks Catherine, maybe I’m just missing the ‘action’ at home with one child out in the world!
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What fun! And very realistic, too! Well done!
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Thanks Beth!
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Oh I loved this Julie. Sibling rivalry at its best….loved, loved it.
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Thanks Diane!
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Story, rhyme, rhythm, humor, developed characters, and a repeating rhyme chorus in under 350?! Outstanding!
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I love the sibling rivalry theme you have going. Very nice, Julie and the ending is funny!
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Thanks Carrie
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My favorite line: Oh what fun it is NOT to face plant in the snow. What a funny story. And you’re right. Sometimes the festive family is not always the truth. Glad you gave us some sibling rivalry to play with!
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Thanks Laura. I accepted the ‘bumpy’ parts of holiday gatherings long ago!
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I laughed out loud at “It seems my sister’s goal, to slay us with her skis.” Funny story and love the sister relationship.
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Glad you liked it! Thanks for stopping by Margaret!
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A grizzly or a moose – funny stuff! I’m glad it ended on a positive note, but something tells me the peace won’t last. Excellently well done, Julie!
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Thanks Renee!
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We look back on the missteps of family gatherings and they are precious and hilarious. This was so funny, Julie!
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Thanks Pam!
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This is really funny!! I felt like I was riding and skiing right along with you! ( Even tho I don’t know anything about skiing!) You’re just too clever!
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Unfortunately that’s all I know about cross country!
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Julie…this is the perfect Christmas/winter in Colorado story. 🙂 I love the tension going on between the two sisters…and how it resolves in the end. Great rhyme…lots of fun!
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Thanks Vivian, it ‘took place’ in Gould!
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Fun, Fun, Fun. I loved your imagery, I could totally picture this vacation with annoying siblings!
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Thanks Jennifer!
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Nice job Julie. Great story. I can just picture it. 🙂
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Thanks Darshana!
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Love the scenes of sibling rivalry, Julie. Such a fun story & so easy to picture.
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Thanks Patricia
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LOVE IT! FUNNY!!! 😀
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Thanks Erik!
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Being one of four girls…I totally related to your Christmas tale! It’s really cute, Julie. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
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Thanks – and congrats to you for the win!
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