It was nerve wracking but fantastic to have gotten feedback* on a manuscript from a real-time editor at the Picture Book Intensive. But in listening to feedback on other writer’s work (we were 14 participants), I could compare my first impression with that of a professional, and I found that even more valuable. Don’t get me wrong, I am not out to grab another person’s ideas! I know what I like to read, and what I don’t, but, yeah, mine is also one person’s opinion. I benefitted by testing my ear for a good story, and possible areas of weakness. I also appreciated the encouragement to comment on the other manuscripts – with just a few minutes per ms it was a good challenge for me to pinpoint what I thought would help their story most (and I hope I didn’t hang out my New York-style frankness too boldly!). And yes, I have far to go!
It was a great opportunity, listening to whole manuscripts, but I really learned a lot from the breakout session First Pages, for picture book mss. A professional reader and picture book author, Kathleen Pelley, read aloud each participant’s first page of their PB ms, max. 200 words. An agent and an editor were given 2 minutes total to respond. If you should ever have the opportunity, take notes on EVERY ms! In less than an hour I believe almost 40 ‘pages’ were read. Having the PBIntensive experience behind me I was more focused and began to hear patterns. After a while I could predict what the reviewers might say! Yes, I was learning something! I highly recommend signing up for this session format!
Here are a few of those First Page comments:
• really hard to sell an MC that is not a child
• too much telling, not enough showing
• narrative too simple, needs more tension
• repetition is not effective
• need more emotional connection with MC
• that story is already out there – check the market
• sentences are too long; careful – joke will be taken away by the illustrations
• keep your narrative child-centered
• don’t know where the story is going till it’s half-way in
• BEGINNING-MIDDLE-ENDING!
• illustrations should complete the text – less description.
*more in another post
Lots of good tips, says the writer who’s wrapping up a non-child MC manuscript. Sigh. The most interesting point you make – “careful – joke will be taken away by the illustrations.” We’re told not to think about illustrations, but yet, we have to think about them.
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Actually, I believe all writers must think visually, so they DON’T describe all the pictures! If you see the punchline in your picture, you’ve GOT to revise accordingly – that punchline might need a wordless spread of it’s own!
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Awesome overview, Julie…thanks!
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Thanks for dropping in!
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These are wonderful reminders, Julie.
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Sounds like a great conference experience!
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Sounds fantastic. Thanks a lot for sharing those pointers. I have two pbs ready to sub, just subbed one today actually 🙂 and neither have a child MC 😦 Oh dear.
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Congrats on getting your mss out there! I think that adults or animals with child-like qualities definitely count!
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Wow! There is so much to learn out there – I wish I could get to some of these conferences. Thanks so much for sharing your experience, Julie!
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So glad you had a good time! Sniff. I miss RMC-SCBWI.
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Congrats! I am glad you liked it! I think I would like it. 🙂
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I’m sure you would! It would be a great thing for a school to put together for a summer class!
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I like First Page Sessions too. They are my favorite group critique format. Glad to hear you got so much out of it!
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Thanks Laura. Hard to know which sessions to choose as a newbie – so glad I did signed on for that one.
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I missed our mid Atlantic conference due to a death in the family but with enough posts on conferences I may get the hang of it anyway! 🙂 thanks for sharing. 🙂
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So sorry for your loss Clar. I plan to do a few more posts on the conference; I hope they get better each time and are helpful too!
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That sounds great!
You can bet I’ll be reading them. 🙂
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Excellent wrap up and pointers. I loved this session, too, and found myself predicting what the agent and editor would say. It was very helpful.
And…It was so much fun meeting my online friends in person 🙂
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O yeah!
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This is a comprehensive list that I will bookmark for the future, and use to critique my own work…thanks Julie!
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